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Thatcham Writers 2002

The Man in the Mac from February Assignment

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by Mark Beach      by Phil Golden      by Di Lawton

by Anita Loughrey   by Geoff Rush   

 

by Mark Beach

The man in the Mac crossed the road in the rain. He stumbled as he reached the far kerb. He tumbled forward full length onto the pavement and rolled sideways, as he rolled over his face was clearly visible.

The image froze on the TV screen and flickered in the darkness.

"Recognize it?" said Detective Inspector Jim Carter to the only other occupant of the room.

"Sure," replied Detective Sergeant Andy Dawson. "It's the CCTV footage that we used to send that slag Bobby Davis down for the raid on Ladbrokes last year."

"That's right, circumstantial evidence that put Davis in the right area at the right time."

"Well sure it was circumstantial, but an ex-con with a history of armed robbery being in the area at the same time?" Dawson held out his hands, palms upward, and gave a shrug. "It was too much of a coincidence for the jury, and I'd have to agree."

Jim carter stood with his back to Andy Dawson looking at the image on the TV screen.

"We had no real evidence against Davis, and he denied it right up to the day he hanged himself in his cell," he said without taking his eyes off the screen.

Andy Dawson raised his eyes to the ceiling, "They all deny it Jim. What's this all about?"

Jim Carter stepped up to the screen and peeled off a post-it note that was stuck in the top right hand corner. The date and time stamp on the video were revealed.

Andy Dawson stared at the fuzzy white numbers flickering in front of his eyes, 06/03/02 10:31:07. He moved towards the screen, utterly transfixed by the numbers, which he could see and understand, but not believe. he raised a hand and tentatively placed his fingertips on the numbers as if they were delicate and might disappear. he turned to look at Jim his jaw moved up and down but no sound emerged.

Jim Carter leaned forward and spoke almost in a whisper, "It's no mistake Andy, that tape was taken out of the camera yesterday... Do you believe in ghosts?"

 

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by Phil Golden

The man in the Mac trudged his way across the street, in the rain, in the gap between rush-hour cars, yellowish in the glow from the streetlights above him. He stared at the ground and muttered as he stomped in a puddle.

He was frustrated and annoyed. As usual his colleagues at the warehouse had been making him feel stupid. His strides like his thoughts; irregular, unlike his long loping gait he used when he was thinking happy thoughts. How come everyone else is so clever and knows so much? They'd all laughed when he told them about his diet.

"Why tell them," he muttered, his breath emerging like smoke. He looked at a rainbow of petrol in a puddle and tried to think some happy thoughts; they wouldn't come.

"Why couldn't he just stay quiet?" he agonized. It always ended the same way; with people laughing at him or worse.

"They think their A levels and degrees make them so clever," he whispered at the cold black road with the shiny yellow stripes. His stride shortened and became more irregular, his shoulders hunched and his brad powerful back bent further forward. He'd not stayed on at school.

'Not academic' they'd labeled him, 'better off in the workplace' they'd said while they shuffled their feet and avoided his eye, 'on-the-job-training' and lots of other things he couldn't understand.

He was suddenly confused, he could smell frying bacon and could hear distant clangs of metal utensils.

"Oh no!" he thought, suddenly terrified. He hoped he wasn't about to wake-up in the police station again. He desperately prayed he hadn't been out in his Mac again, he'd promised them he wouldn't: the policeman and the doctor and the tall woman with the angry eyes. They'd warned him not to, now he was so afraid. his heart skipped a beat then his pulse began to race. He didn't mean to. He didn't know why he did it, only that it happened when he was angry.

He stumbled as he reached the far kerb, blood beginning to weep from the cuts in the soles of his bare feet.

 

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by Di Lawton
It was a busy Friday morning in Spring but felt more like Winter. Everywhere looked grey, rain fell from the taps in the sky and the wind made the treetops sway like oscillating pipe cleaners. Typical weekend weather.

The population of this small town in the royal country were busying themselves with their usual routines. Nothing out of the ordinary or newsworthy ever happened here.

One man in particular found it very easy to mingle amongst the crowds. he was in his early thirties. Tall and quite good looking with a goatee beard. his spectacles made him look intelligent so carrying a brief case around seemed quite normal. You couldn't see the quality of his clothes because he was wearing a Mac but at a glance at his well worn and scruffy shoes indicated that he didn't have alot of spare cash.

In order to get shelter, the man in the Mac crosses the road in the rain. He stumbles as he reaches the far kerb. it startled him a bit, making his heart miss a beat. He smiled to himself  and had a quick look round, hoping that nobody had seen what had happened. Most people feel such a clot when they do something stupid in public.

A policewoman came over to ask if he was okay. The man in the Mac said yes and as he turned his briefcase fell open and £50K in used bank notes tumbled out and were carried away in the breeze.

 

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by Anita Loughrey

Toby crosses the road pulling his Mac tightly around him as protection against the downpour. As he reaches the far kerb he stumbles. He glances around to see if anyone noticed. A streetlight flickers. Steadying himself, he continues towards the railway station and into Smiths where he saunters over to the magazines and peruses the various glossies: Playboy, Erotica, Penthouse and Wicked Wives.

He notices the bitch at the counter clocking his every move. Toby tries to look casual as he flicks through the magazine. He stares in shock as he catches a glimpse of himself in the mirrored pillar. His pupils are over-dilated, he has 24-hour stubble and his greasy hair hangs limply in his face. His grey Mac is ripped at the seams. He looks an unsavoury character. He grins, exhibiting his uneven, nicotine-stained teeth.

Toby opens the center-fold and a drop of saliva drawls from the corner of his mouth. Pressing himself against the pillar he clumsily rolls the magazine and stuffs it through the Mac and under his jumper. He secures the magazine under his arm as he ambles towards the door. A uniformed man looms up behind him and places a hand firmly on his shoulder.

The cow of a cashier must have sounded the alarm. Toby tries in vain to bolt through the door to disappear into the evening deluge. The security guard has a tight grip of his Mac. Toby’s hand instinctively goes to his pocket and his newly purchased stash of speed.

 

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by Geoff Rush

The man in the Mac crosses the road in the rain. he stumbles as he reaches the far kerb. Snatches hold of an elderly woman weighed down with shopping bags to steady himself. Apologizes as he extricates his foot from the tramlines.

Tomo Savic watches from the parked Audi, grins at the antics of the comical little figure. He is hopping from one foot to the other, arms waving as he attempts to placate the irate woman.

The Audi's engine is idling, the heater blasting warm air at the windscreen. Savic tweaks it down a notch.

The pair on the pavement have separated, the man raising his felt hat in a final exaggerated gesture of cynical defiance. Savic chuckles aloud. He has never seen 'screw you' addressed more eloquently. The man turns, jams the hat back on his head, face like thunder.

It is at the moment fractionally before the Homburg descends that Savic jerks upright in his seat, as if a sudden surge of electricity has passed through his body. Sweet Jesus! He is gripping the steering wheel like it is his only grasp on sanity.

Slowly, the view through the rain-slicked windscreen dissolves and he is back where the nightmares often take him.

The sun is burning on the nape of his neck and he is conscious of a sharp pain in his left kneecap. Next to him, his friend Vlado is whimpering with fear. Along with twenty other men and teenage boys from the village they are kneeling, heads bowed, on the far side of the rough patch of ground that serves as a makeshift football pitch. Savic is at the end of the line.

A strutting little figure appears among the ragged group of armed militia. he is Dragan Buckovic, leader of the local Serbs. The nearest man to Savic stiffens, drops the butt of his cigarette, grinds it into the dirt. Savic's senses are on high alert. he keeps his head down. This is not a good time to attract attention.

Buckovic swaggers along the line. He says something Savic does not hear properly - something about Croats and donkeys. The militia solders cackle their approval. A pair of gleaming riding boots halt in front of Savic. Such small feet. He draws in his breath, waits stoically for what he knows must come. He has heard the rumours from the other villages. The boots disappear, around and behind him. He can hear the soles slapping on the baked earth, heading back up the line.

There is a momentary silence. The calm before the storm.

Then the first shat. A whipcrack that echoes through the trees skirting the killing ground. Savic is overtaken by the urge to run, to make for the treeline, but it is futile. The AK47s of the militia would cut him to pieces. Besides, his entire body is paralysed, disconnected from his brain.

The shots draw closer. Sounds merge in Savic's head, a surreal tape recording, meaningless without the vivid images that flood his mind's eye. Branko, the fat youth from the big house, wails for his mother, the high-pitched cry mercifully terminated by the booming Makarov in Buckovic's hand.

Not long now. Savic steels himself, feel his heart rate soar. Blood and brain spatter his cheek as Vlado's head disintegrates. His turn. The scent of pine trees mingles with the stench of cordite and death. Go bravely, Tomo, he tells himself. He raises his head for one last glimpse of the sun. Senses rather than feels the hot metal of the automatic against the back of his neck.

Then the world turns upside down.

He hears the dull click, the muttered curse, the slick metallic sound as Buckovic feverishly works the action, the ejected round pinging off a stone.

Through the fog comes a moment of intense clarity. Savic realises that the gun has jammed. Quite suddenly, he identifies the source of the pain in his left knee. He has been kneeling on a sharp-edged flint. he can actually picture its shape. And something else. Instinctively, he knows fro certain that he is going to survive.

Click. Click. More dud rounds ejected. A roar from Buckovic. The gun slamming into the ground. A blinding flash of light as Buckovic's boot connects savagely with the back of his head. A bolt of pain, then darkness.

Savic's head is slumped on his chest. he drags it upright. Sweat is leaking out of his forehead and he notices a damp patch on his shirtfront. The rain is still lashing the windscreen and he automatically flicks on the wipers. The street slides back into focus.

And there, right in front of him, stands Buckovic. He is checking the traffic, about to cross over, a bunch of carnations in his clenched fist.

Stills of a distant football field interchange with the now, blinking strobe images before his eyes. His fingers grip the handbrake, foot jammed hard on the accelerator. So easy.

Buckovic steps off the pavement. The audi lurches forward. Sensing the danger, Buckovic pauses in mid-stride, momentarily transfixed. Then he is moving, fast. The Audi flashes past. Savic hits the brakes. Through the door mirror, he glimpses Buckovic half turn. He is still in the middle of the street, face contorted, arms flapping furiously.

Then Savic realises, Buckovic is caught fast, his foot trapped in the tramlines. people are gesticulating, yelling at the man in the street.

Savic spots the tram bearing down, twists in his sweat in time to watch it plough into the flailing figure. Speadeagled across its front, like a man crucified, Buckovic's body is carried several metres before it slips beneath the wheels.

The tram clanks to a halt. People converge, gathering in a concerned huddle around the first carriage.

As he eases the Audi away from the kerb, Savic feels nothing. He has become impervious to death. It no longer has the power to evoke feeling. All he will carry with him is the stark image of a small childlike shoe and a few scattered flowers, debris strewn across the damp cobblestones of a Vienna street.

 

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